My favorite place is California.
five year ago it was my first time going to California and while i was there i saw my sister.
We went to California for three days and four nights.
My partner drove for one day and half to get to California.
California is different from Washington. In California
is hotter and things are less expensive. In California i had so
much fun with ma sister and my family. My granddaughter went,
she was 5 months. We went to the stores n bought new stuff. Also
we took my sister to work in toys r' us .
When I was in California, I went to Disneyland.
I went to Disneyland with my family we had so much fun.
When I was in Disneyland i got in most of the games. Our goal
was to ride all games but we didn't reach our goal. At 8:00 pm
a festival started. All the Disney characters were walking and taking
pictures with people. Around 10 pm, there were fireworks. we stayed
until 11 pm.
My favorite place is California. I had so much fun with my family.
I will never forget that weekend. When i got home i was telling all
my friends about what i had experienced at California and i hope i
go to California again.
Sounds like a great trip! Good organizing - good past tense verbs!
ReplyDeleteWe say "rides" instead of "games" for Disneyland.
Something that doesn't fit is the part about "California is different from Washington..... less expensive". Delete that - could be used for another post, when you can give examples.
Last paragraph: Remove the first two sentences - you already said those things.
life is great, and California to hot but it's fun isnt it
ReplyDeleteHi Maria,
ReplyDeleteHow are you doing!
I remember went I was in California long time ago, is completely diferent that WA. Anyway, I stil waiting for more stories about yourself.
Hi, Maria you have reason, I don't know california, but I think that is a very good place, for the weather, for the people, and thefor diferents place
ReplyDeleteHi Maria, I really like your essay, I went to Disneyland just one time, we start at 8 or 9 o'clock in the morning thru 3 o'clock in the morning, could you believe that! I was super tired, but I didn't care, I just love it..
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